Essentials of Business Communication 8th Edition by Mary Ellen Guffey

Exercise 3

The following letter has errors in spelling, proofreading, commas, parallelism, and other writing techniques studied in previous chapters. You may either (a) use standard proof reading marks (see Appendix B) to correct the errors here or (b) download the document from www.megutfey.com and revise at your computer. Study the guidelines in the Grammar/Mechanics Handbook to sharpen your skills.
Current date
Mr. John Brumfield
Human Resources Development
Gulfport Energy Enterprises
1400 Longhorn Blvd.
Houston, TX 76400
Dear Mr. Bumfield:
Did you know about the direct link between the health of your employes, and the health of your profits? Because we in the midst of tough economic times you are in all probability looking for benefits to offer your employees that help both you and them.
The benefits of healthyer employees includes lower health care costs, fewer medical claims, improved productivity, better morale arid absenteeism is reduced. Here is how you can help your employees to have sound bodies, and also improve your companys profits:
• Provide them with Galaxy Fitness health club discounts.
• Bring our aerobics, massage, weight loss and educational programs on-site.
• You should have us manage your on-site fitness center.
Business Fortune magazine recently reported the following: "After a prevention and early intervention health program was implemented at L. L. Bean loss claims dropped by approximately 40 percent."
Please call [phone] and speak to Jan Novak who is our corporate fitness expert to learn how you can add to the health of each and every employee and also to you are bottom line.
Sincerely,
GALAXY FITNESS
Missy Mischke
Senior Marketing Manager