College Writing Skills with Readings 8th Edition by John Langan

Exercise 2

Here are the final three paragraphs from the two essays. Edit the sentences in the first essay to make the corrections needed. Note that comparing essays 1 and 2 will help you locate the mistakes. This activity will also help you identify some of the sentence skills you may want to review in Part 4.
... 13 Gossiping friends at school are also perfect targets for a simple act of revenge. 14 A way to trap either male or female friends are to leave phony messages on their lockers. 15 If the friend that you want to get is male, leave a message that a certain girl would like him to stop by her house later that day. 16 With any luck, her boyfriend will be there. 17 The girl won't know what's going on, and the victim will be so embarrassed that he probably won't leave his home for a month. 18 The plan works just as well for female friends, too.
19 When Mom and Dad and your sisters and brothers really begin to annoy you, harmless revenge may be just the way to make them quite down for a while. 20 The dinner table, where most of the nagging probably happens, is a likely place. 21 Just before the meal begins, throw a handful of raisins into the food. 22 Wait about 5 minutes and, after everyone has began to eat, clamp your hand over your mouth and begin to make odd noises.
23 When they ask you what the matter is, point to a raisin and yell, "Bugs!"
24 Dumping the food in the disposal, the car, will head quickly for mcdonald's
25 That night, you'll have your first quiet, peaceful meal in a long time.
26 Well-planned revenge does not have to hurt anyone. 27 The object is simply to let other people know that they are beginning to bother you.
28 You should remember, though, to stay on your guard after completing your revenge. 29 The reason for this is simple,. coworkers, friends, and family can also plan revenge on you.
... Gossiping friends at school are also perfect targets for a simple act of revenge. A way to trap either male or female friends is to leave phony messages on their lockers. If the friend that you want to get is male, leave a message that a certain girl would like him to stop by her house later that day. With any luck, her boyfriend will be there. The girl won't know what's going on, and the victim will be so embarrassed that he probably won't leave his When Mom and Dad and your sisters and brothers really begin to annoy you, harmless revenge may be just the way to make them quiet down for a while. The dinner table, where most of the nagging probably happens, is a likely place. Just before the meal begins, throw a handful of raisins into the food. Wait about five minutes and, after everyone has begun to eat, clamp your hand over your mouth and begin to make odd noises. When they ask you what the matter is, point to a raisin and yell, "Bugs!" They'll all dump their food in the disposal, jump into the car, and head quickly for McDonald's. That night, you'll have your first quiet, peaceful meal in a long time.
Well-planned revenge does not have to hurt anyone. The object is simply to let other people know that they are beginning to bother you. You should remember, though, to stay on your guard after completing your revenge. The reason for this is simple. Coworkers, friends, and family can also plan revenge on you. home for a month. The plan works just as well for female friends, too.
When Mom and Dad and your sisters and brothers really begin to annoy you, harmless revenge may be just the way to make them quiet down for a while. The dinner table, where most of the nagging probably happens, is a likely place. Just before the meal begins, throw a handful of raisins into the food. Wait about fi ve minutes and, after everyone has begun to eat, clamp your hand over your mouth and begin to make odd noises. When they ask you what the matter is, point to a raisin and yell, Bugs! They ll all dump their food in the disposal, jump into the car, and head quickly for McDonald s. That night, you ll have your fi rst quiet, peaceful meal in a long time. Well-planned revenge does not have to hurt anyone. The object is simply to let other people know that they are beginning to bother you. You should remember, though, to stay on your guard after completing yourrevenge. The reason for this is simple. Coworkers, friends, and family can alsoplan revenge on you.