Business Communication 9th Edition by Amy Newman

Exercise 29

Revise to convey an appropriate tone.
Revise the paragraph to create a more confident, less presumptuous tone.
If you believe my proposal has merit, I hope that you will allocate $50,000 for a pilot study. It's possible that this pilot study will achieve my profit estimates so that we can implement the idea in other locations. Even though you have several other worthwhile projects to consider for funding, I know you will agree the proposal should be funded prior to January 1. Please call me before the end of the week to tell me that you've accepted my proposal.