Business Communication 9th Edition by Amy Newman

Exercise 33

Revise this passage to avoid platitudes, obvious flattery, and exaggeration.
You, our loyal and dedicated employees, have always been the most qualified and the hardest working in the industry. Because of your faithful and dependable service, I was quite surprised to learn yesterday that an organizational meeting for union representation was recently held here. You must realize that a company like ours cannot survive unless we hold labor costs down. I cannot believe that you don't appreciate the many benefits of working at Allied. We will immediately have to declare bankruptcy if a union is voted in. Please don't be fooled by empty rhetoric.