At a Local Elementary School,parents Were Lingering in the Classroom

Essay

At a local elementary school,parents were lingering in the classroom past the start of the school day,making the emotional transition harder for their children.The parents were also crowding the limited physical space within the classrooms and doorways.Olivia is asked to draft a notice to be distributed to the kindergarteners' parents to rectify this problem.Discuss Olivia's draft and how to improve it.
"Attention kindergarten parents: do not remain in your children's classrooms for too long,as this is causing problems."